Eyes Closed Ivory
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Part I
Blood Traced The staircase
That Gruesome Afternoon
That look upon his face
As he lay by the moon
Ivory's eyes heavy with ache
Trust slipping more
with every breath she'd take
His skin laced withe gore
Shaking him yet to wake
Never again to see such lies
"This scenery is fake
You foolish eyes!"
Now it's time for a cut,
A destined fate
So, with a thread of guilt
and a needle of hate
She has sewn her eyelids shut.
Part II
A woman now at 23
his blank stare
all she can see
no one to care
but a man by her side
she can't see him there
but he doesn't hide
feelings do spark
curiousity starts to leak
after so long in the dark
she finally wants to peek
their love does bloom
just like a flower
he'll be her groom
by midnight hour
her eyes soon to wake
her lover's beautiful face
the first glance she'll take
eyes bleeding ebony lace
left such a mess
her heart spilled upon her wedding dress
as he arrives
she opens her eyes
only to see once more
a man she loves
dead on the floor
as her hate arose
she knew...
Part III
This time the needle just wouldn't do.
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Thank you so much i really appreciate it:]
this is a beautiful poem :) i love the drawings
Wow, this is really intense and the pictures work so well with it. Really great! I read this a few times over, and am still trying to make it out fully, but I think there's probably remaining veiled to me. This definitely seems to hint at something... Maybe a desire to be completely blind? I'm sure there's a lot to this I'm just not deciphering, but I enjoy trying to figure out these puzzles... I've written poems in a similar fashion myself, but I think they pale in comparison. You did a masterful job with this.
hatred is a needle isn`t it? and always wounds...someone; nicely metaphor-ed !
Thank you guys so much:] This story is mostly about all the men in my life that have wronged me. I find myself thinking "How could I have been so blind?" and also"I wish I was blind so I could be ignorant to my dreadful surroundings."
Also Bud, I'd love to read these poems of yours:]
Thanks for the background. It makes sense.
I haven't written any for quite a while, but there is a link on my profile here for the ones I have done over the last several years. I'd skip the 2 most recent one's, though, because they are just an experiment gone wrong. I don't like how they turned out.
ii3rittles Level 3 Commenter 10 months ago
I love "her eyes soon to wake her lover's beautiful face the first glance she'll take eyes bleeding ebony lace". Very emo/romantic. I loved it. Thank you for sharing this. =)